Name: Asami Anissa

Gender: F

Age: 21

Place of Birth: Japan

Species: Mortal

Marital Status: Long-term relationship

Appearance: When she was younger, almost in the eighth grade, she stood only to about 5"3', thus many students referred to her as "little shorty" as most of them were much taller than her. As she is nearly twenty-two now, she is still a short young woman. At her full height, she is about 5"6' and weighs almost one-hundred-twenty pounds. A diet of mostly salad and rice- her favorite foods- has given her a slim figure. So slim, that on a few occasions if she had her hair up and wore no make-up, some thought of her as a boy.... If seen out in public these days, she will be noticeably wearing lipgloss, mascara, and eye-liner... with her hair usually down or fancied up with decorative clips.

Her attire will mainly consist of backless halter tops and skirts during the summer; then many layers of different shirts plus jeans once winter arrives. Her facial features are attractive: large dark eyes, almost black, yet they tend to brighten up considerably when reflecting light or when she's laughing, a small defined nose, and plump lips. Deep brown strands of hair frame her face; hair that is a sharp contrast against her light complexion. She has one tattoo: that of a red and black butterfly behind her right shoulder.


History: Born in Osaka, Japan, Anissa was loved and cherished by quite a young mother. (She was but seventeen.) Raised among her mother's side of the family, japanese, Anissa never once heard of or saw her father. She was told he had died before she was born, and that he was of french blood. Not a single day passed that Nisa didn't think of her father. It was hard not to envy all the other girls in her school, the ones who had their "otousan" with them. One day she decided to ask her mother how he had died, but became puzzled when no answer came; her mother usually changed the subject or hurried off to do something else. She tried asking her other relatives, but was still disappointed when they only gave her pitiful looks or simply turned away.

A few months after her ninth birthday, her mother smiled brightly at her, pulled Nisa in her arms and asked if she'd like to go to america. "It will be better for you," her mother had said, still smiling. Nisa couldn't help but smile back and nod. She wondered if the rest of the family would be going. "We will come later," had been the answer. "You will go on ahead and live with your grandmother... your other grandmother. Your father's mother."

Nisa's lips had parted then. Why, any mention of anything or anybody related to her father sent shivers of joy through her. Maybe it was very possible that this other grandmother knew something about her son?

Another week passed; Anissa could happily say that she was now in america. Her 'new' grandmother was very sweet and kind, and she spoke very funny. She was much older than what Nisa expected, and every now and then she would stare at the tiny wrinkles that formed at the sides of her grandmother's eyes whenever she smiled or laughed. She grew highly fond of her.

Nisa was assigned an english instructor to help her learn, what else, english.

Four months passed. Nisa finally gathered up the courage and, struggling a bit with the words, asked her grandmother how her father had died. She held her breath as the older lady prepared to answer. "Dearie, your father isn't dead... who told you such a story? He's living in France and that's all I know. He plans to call us this weekend to say hello, isn't that nice?"

Hearing that, Anissa frowned. Nice? How could that be anything near the word? Up until now, she had thought him dead and there he was, living somewhere else, on another continent! Was he married to someone else? Did Nisa have any other brothers or sisters? For someone her age, she shouldn't be thinking of such things and it made her sick. From that day forward, instead of feeling a great love for her deceased father, she felt such deep contempt; hatred towards him.

When he called that weekend as he had said, Anissa didn't want to talk. Instead, she took the phone and slammed it down on the receiver much to her grandmothers shock and surprise. The phone didn't ring again that night.

At seventeen, Nisa grew to forget about her father and her japanese family (none of whom ever wished to come to america. Nisa could either take her move away from them as good or bad.). Throughout the past few years she had had trouble making friends as her english was still broken and it was hard to communicate. She developed an anti-social quality due to this. She also became highly shy. It wasn't until she fell into the cyber world of chatting that she grew incredibly close to one Texan, whom she enjoys calling Sephy. Once Nisa graduated, she moved to Demaitre with him. (She still keeps in touch with her grandmother) She is currently working at the Mercy Hospital and she's trying hard to break out of her timid shell.

You did a great job, but I'm really going to have to ask for a bit more in both physical description and history. Especially in the history portion. Put in all that you can think of about your character, everything she's experienced in her life and all the things she's seen. Nothing, how slight is too meager to put in there.

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Umm, alright... I will try to add more, but really, that was the best I could do for her because I made her up on the spot and I don't really like adding so much depth to a character (i.e stuff like all that she's experienced in her life..) because I don't feel that she needs to be taken so seriously.. *sigh* But I will try and think of more stuff..

Honestly I think we should be able to put what we feel is needed for our profile, and not such great big paragraphs when we could make up for it in posts. Just my opinion.

I understand your feeling, trust me when I say I do. But well the level of detail is pretty much what Vital is all about as an RP. Here we take things pretty close to the cuff so to speak, that is to say that we take most things as serious as we can, because we want to RP to be true to life. Here if your character is a serial murder or a thin little girl living on the streets, we really want you to get into that person's head and heart, have an intimate understanding of them.

It just that, the little things really that makes this an "advanced" RPG. I see how it might be frustrating, but when you finally got things in place, when you meet other people on site you'll be able to see the difference that fully developed characters make.

Or at least I hope you do, so please just bear with me, please.

Okay, finally edited it. :] Hope it's somewhat better!

In a word, great. Approved.