Title: lyrics in untitled
Description: with or without?
rinsk - July 26, 2003 06:55 PM (GMT)
a lot of people have said that untitled is the weakest song on the cd...and that its missing something. this is true, the song was written for vocals, and i do think its kind of weird without them...
but its a pain in the ass to write lyrics..
so what do you guys who have heard it think? im trying to write some right now, and its not comming along too nicely....
rinsk - August 13, 2003 01:33 AM (GMT)
the lyrics i have so far:
1
marking time
shifting, beating
giving your all,
means giving me
something more than excuses and hate
dont try, just relax
like rocks in the sand,
you break the tide
millions of pieces
millions of stars
each one a sun
each one a blaze
canyons, rivers, streams
ive lost them all
ive lost everything
something tells me
to hide whats left
whats to my right
whats to the north
silent as tears
silent as the earth shifts beneath
running out of breath....
2
dont stop the rain
dont stop the way your eyes sink
deeper below this sea
we call communication
split the clouds, split the earth
cracks deeper than thoes eyes
and almost half as empty
does it really matter?
what you used to feel...
all that i care about
are the actions you conceal
3
she slams the door
actng out on impulse
did you really think
it would go unoticed
i cant for long
i cant hold back
dont shift the blame
its all on you
crashing like waves
everything is getting dark
did you see the sunset?
or did you shift that as well
circles to squares
night to day
i dont really mind,
but you have to admit...
man thats a lot of bull....
8jumper - August 24, 2003 01:17 AM (GMT)
hmm.... maybe try writing what you need/ want to say in prose before poetry, ex. use full sentences... It might help link some of the broken thoughts and sentences a bit better, making them seem less like space fillers. Then go back and work it into the song. Could work.. then again, I don't really know.
rinsk - August 25, 2003 03:43 AM (GMT)
hmm...
well i wrote the lyrics while listening to the song, and they are well, written specifically to exactly fit in the spaces of the song. so the only problem is the fragmentation? i can try to clean it up, give it a more thought, or hey, you can even help me....i hate writing lyrics and have nothign to write about...so....
rinsk - August 25, 2003 08:53 PM (GMT)
i just recorded this...and i think it sounds like crap...
so i hope the new shorter, broken up untitled will win the hearts of little girls everywhere....
