Flashback
“Mr Mcfadden? I’m so sorry we couldn’t revive her, we tried all the best we could but it just wouldn’t work. The death was caused while giving birth to your baby daughter I’m afraid, we’re not quite sure what was wrong with her yet so we are looking into it”
“NOOOOOOOOOOOOOO” Bryan screamed falling on his knees. “We were gonna get married and I love her so much but I’m never going to see her again”
“I’m so sorry Mr Mcfadden we tried all we could. You can come and see her and say your last words if you want to”
End of flashback

Bryan sat on the Café Chair staring out of the window, Tears were pooring down his face but he was trying so hard not to let anyone see him crying but it was too late.
“Bryan whats wrong?”
“You know what Shane, it’s 3 years today since _____ died and I miss her sooo much, I try not to let it show but Shane we could have been married now and I know she would love to have seen Megan grow up. Megan doesn’t even know who her mum is”
Shane leaned over and gave Bryan a hug. “Bryan we all miss her and I can’t imagine what it must be like for you, all I know is that I never ever want to lose ____ because I love her so much, I know it’s so hard for you and you must be so upset but listen why don’t we go out tonight just me and you?”
“Thanx so much Shane I really appreciate it”
“No problem Bry, what are mates for eh?”
“Shane why is Daddy Crying?” Megan said looking worried
“Megan Daddy doesnt feel well hunny, he will be ok soon” Megan went over to Bryan and gave him a hug.
“Daddy Don’t cry, you get better soon” Bryan smiled as she said this, Bryan loved his daughter more than anything in the world and couldn’t imagine life without her……….





I'm trying to write a fanfic and its the first 1 ive written so please give me feedback and tell me TRUTHFULLY what you think cos i'm not sure whether to carry i on or not. I dont really think much of it myself lol

Thanx
Lianne
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It's brill!!!!

:D

it really is!! I'd read it!!

Usually fics I can't stand but yours is good! :)

and it's the truth! not lieing here!

aww thanx hun :D sure ur not lying? lol

I'm well erm.. 110% sure I'm not lying!!

it's really good! I like it myself!

To be honest I can't read anything unless I like the first paragraph or something. But I do like yours! I'd read it!

Ever gunna fill in 'em blanks though?

Or is it gunna be a semi-interactive story which the person can think their name is there???

hmmm well i dunno how to do interactive fan fics but im gonna hold auditions lol
thanx soooo much hun ;)

you're quite welcome!

auditions are alwayz fun!!

I'm almost done with Chappie 4 in my fic!

maybe i"ll post it on here...

yupperz I know.. :(

it's sad... all the great ficcies that are there.. the one i'm in.. :(

oh well..

I hope everyone has a backup file! if they don't well then we're screwed.. I guess...

But you should really go further with this fic of yours it is quite brill! :D

Hmmmm give me one good reason why i shouldn't move this topic to fanfics.....Erm the boss wrote it :o lol

Shanesvoice xxx

lol well hun i was thinking why did i post it in here n i actually dunno how to fully detele topics (i know how to delete posts) or i dunno how to move them. im gonna have to ask some1 on another msg board lol

you odn't know how to move topics????

hm.. lemme see...

there should be a thing at the bottom that says Moderator options...

and it says a list click move topic then click okay then go to which forum you want...

its brill hun. u have to continue it

Hun, that is so sweet and fab!!

It's kinda true really - u do get flashbacks etc like that so well done!! :D

Keep up da good work! :D

great work there hun!! :D woo love the flashback thingy :D can i ask for more? :P

cleo
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