!!! = Warning: This is a good size fanfic, so if you don't like lengthy script, leave now. = !!!

Edited: Story have been revamp, so you may want to read it again. The first part will not have as much different in the beginning, but the farther it goes, the more you notice a change. Part two will definitely have the most changes to it. Also, to Hazzardous advice, I gave you all a summary to let you know what is going on in the story.

((Yeah, I am doing a fanfic (a coupling fanfic to boot), so I'm asking you all to be flexible about it. The event take place sometime in the near future in the Sonic the Hedgehog comic...and may be used for other purposes as well. As for the change of appearance and name of Robo-Fiona, that is a plot device to make some sense in the story, so don't kill me for it.))

Sonic the Hedgehog:
"From Falsehood to True Love"
Made by: GamemasterMZ

= Part Zero: Summary =
The story takes place after the event of Enerjak defeated by Super Sonic and Locke's action (issue #184). The gangs, after dealing with the aftermath of the events following the sacrifice of Locke, are trying to improve their city environments. Meanwhile, poor Tails was still hurting from past situations: ranging from the disappointment of the fake Fiona, (issue #28) to the betrayal of the real Fiona (issue #172).

The focus of the story revolve on the robot duplicate Fiona, who Robotnik Prime (the original Robotnik) once was used to lured Tails into a trap. However, Tails escaped the trap and end up trying to dodge Robo-Fiona vicious attacks. The one-sided battle ended when Fiona started to rust from the water, resulting in a last act of love for the robot when Tails save her from being short-circuited by the water and left to continue his quest to be recognized as a serious Freedom Fighter.

= Part One: Reviving from the Rust =
Sound of birds and dolphins and wave of water outside was blurring inside the darkness. Voices were heard as the figure stand there like a statue. "Look at the craftsmanship made into this fine robot," said one voice. "That Robotnik for you, he may be evil, but he knows how to make fine robots," said the second voice. "I just wonder why this rushed robot was doing on the beach in front of the water like that," ask the first voice.

The figure, trying to compute what is going on, but all it can find was errors. "Who know and who care...I don't even know why you are fixing that thing anyway," reply the second voice, now in an annoy voice. "Ah, you know me Tom, when I see fine masterpiece, I can not ignore it. Beside, it is too damaged to do any harm, anyway. I will just refine it enough and make a beautiful statue for my garden," stated the first voice.

"Well Mac, I guess if you put it like that, I don't a problem with it," reply Tom, who gave up the argument and went up a stair. Then, sounds of metal clicking and buzzing filled the sound receiver in the robot ear. It went on for what seem like hours, before it stops and the voice let out a sigh. "There, you're pretty again, I hope you like the new 'paint-job'," Mac said as he was walking away onto the stair.

Quiet now, other than sound of water hitting something similar to some word. Within the darkness, light of data was flowing freely, forming information and programming. Then, a voice started to form in the darkness, though it wasn't out-loud. <"System rebooting...waiting...waiting...oh boy, more waiting...rebooting complete."> The figure eyes open up, but it stands still for a moment, as data pathway continue to flow.

<"System check...scanning...system check complete. Found 23% of data corruption...recovering data...sigh...17% corrected, though 6% is still too damaged for repair. I guess that have to do...system are online."> The figure started to move and respond to the data flowing, though not smoothly. Rust prevent the robot from moving correctly, though Mac managed to get rid of some of the rust.

<"That 'Mac' seems to patch me up good, but my system still not running correctly...need better maintenance when I get back to Lord Robotnik. ...Checking memory and reorganized task manager...mission: terminated Freedom Fighters...mission: terminated Freedom Fighter's base of operation...mission: terminate Freedom Fighter known as Tai...l...l...system error...">

The robot just stops moving, twitching and creating electricity spark. When the robot comes across that name, memories of a young two-tails fox become to come into focus. <"System error...system error...correcting error...correcting......correction failed."> More memories come to focus, as it tries to figure the error. <"Correcting error...correction...again, correction failed. What is going on?">

Suddenly, memory of the two-tails fox pulling out a red female fox out of the ocean and the sad look in his eyes come into clear view. The memory didn't have any sound, but it caused the robot to stop function altogether for a moment. <"System err...r...or. Wh...what is wrong with me? I...need to get repair...I will just turn off the task manager for right now and wait to get to land.">

Meanwhile, Sonic was resting by a tree as he tries to make sense of the past. A lot of things have happen during a short time, memory so strong that caused the hyperactive hedgehog to think for a while. Many of these events were too depressing for Sonic to think for too long and some of the events were just plain annoying. Sally was standing some distance away, who was working with Rotor and Nicole on improving the nanotechnology in their new home, pause to look at Sonic with the same feeling of sadness.

She decided to stop for a moment and walk up Sonic, who just noticed that Sally near him. Rotor and Nicole look at her for a moment, but decided it was none of their business and return to work. Looking upward with a curious look on his face, he asks,”Hey, Sal, what up?” She looks at Sonic’s face for a moment, then answer, “I was just wondering how you are feeling.”

“Heh, I’m fine…,” Sonic said with a grin on his face for a moment, then it slide down to a frown, “…Well, as fine as I can get right now.” “Listen Sonic, you did your best to help Knuckles…more than I ever did. It wasn’t your fault, the situation was out of hand and the truth is, Locke made the decision on his own. In the very least, your actions did open Locke’s heart to his son.”

“Heh, yeah I guess…but, I still feel sorry for poor Knux.” Sally couldn’t find anymore words to use to ease Sonic’s guilt and sadness. And, the truth is, she don’t know if she can even ease her own, since she almost gave up on Knuckles out of fear. It seems like nothing is going right anymore, she thought.

However, not everyone is depressed, as Bunnie and Antoine is happily working together, in a fashion that comes across as dancing. They were redesigning their little pad, which was coming along nicely. Tails was also enjoying the day, soaking up the nice refreshing sunlight. There was no device that he need fixing or nothing he need done, so he sigh a relief as he stared forward and listening to the birds singing.

But, as Tails look onward at the two love-bugs, it brings back old memories...painful memories. The betrayal of Fiona, the slap she gave to him, his fight with Sonic, and the past memories of the robot duplicate. He just feels alone right then, alone with memories he wish could just disappear. He got up and let out a more depress sigh, then decide a ride in the Tornado was better than thinking of bad memories.

Scene return to the boat as the two uploads the robot off the ship and onto a transport vehicle. They got into the transport vehicle and jet off toward the new Mobotropolis. Inside the back of the vehicle, the false female fox plans on waiting for a chance to escape and used her enemies own devices to repair her, in addition to gather up any new information. As the vehicle come through the gate, she walked to the door and peak outward.

She has never seen this high-develop technology before and was giggly at how useful it would be for her to use in her mission. Then, she saw Nicole in her mobian form, who was still working with Rotor and Sally, bringing up holographic screen for them to see. She freak out for a moment and went backward, trying to keep out of her view. Nicole might made thing worse for her repair and research mission, but that didn't make the robot surrender her missions.

She went back to the door and waits until she was at the perfect blind spot to jump outward without anyone seeing her, then dash into a good hiding spot. She looks around; trying to find any computer ports or something she could used to repair herself. Luckily, she found one and hooks it into the port, though she was nervous about doing so with the possible detection from Nicole.

She decided to be somewhat clever and disguises the process using the same frequency as she scanned from Nicole. She looks up information on the Freedom Fighters, information on the new council and known events, the surprising defeat of her known Robotnik and the new version known as Dr. Eggman, and then she looks at the information of Tails. She studies it for a moment, as if she was hypnotized by the data, then slap out of it while looking confuse. Subsequently, at one point of the data, she notices a portion on Fiona Fox.

<"It seems my double is causing a lot of issue with Tails and the Freedom Fighters. Hmmm...this may present some trouble for me. I was just hoping to update my look to an older version, but that may not work now. I may need to update my body design entirely to get closer to Tails, with the help of these 'nano-bots'."> She took out the cord from the port and transforms her finger into a plug-like device. She insert it into the port and draws some nano-bots, though not too many to draw any attention to herself, and reprograms them to do her bidding.

<"Ahhh, I am finally starting to recover...now, let see about my redesign."> She pauses for a moment, trying to think of a design that would be perfect for her to use to lure Tails and the rest of the Freedom Fighters. She looks into several different factors that she could use for her new disguise, including the new information on Tails and concepts of the perfect formula to lure Tails into getting her closer to her main goal.

Finally, after getting the formula she wants, she smile evilly and got up, as she begin to glow. It was impossible for someone to see the process, since she was at a good hiding spot, and with Nicole occupy as she is, she could notice a temporary spike of energy in the area that the robot's new nano-bots was giving off. She sat down as her new nano-bots reconfigured her old body to match the ideal disguise for her mission. <“Now, all I have to do is to wait.”>

Time passed as Tails return in a better mood as he was heading to his and Sonic's pad. It was night-time, slightly before midnight, as crickets were chirping like they normally would. Sonic was just to enter into the door as Tails was about a block away from there. "That has to be my most impressive flying to date. Too bad that no one saw me, because it was great."

However, before he was able to get 3 feet from the door, he saw someone in the shadow. "Hello? Is anyone there," Tails ask, a little scared. Sudden, the shadow come into the light and Tails' eye just become so hypnotized. In front of him lay a mysterious pure white female fox with a beautiful tan-ish color for the secondary fur and a light blue-ish purple for marking patterns. She has a darker blue-ish purple for the gorgeous hair-like fur on her head.

Like Tails, she has two tails, though they were slightly longer and fluffier. In addition, there was some marking on the tails as well closed to the end of the tail, just before it reaches the secondary fur. She has a dark blue pant with an orange mini-shirt attach to the pant. She was wearing orange shoe with black marking on it. Moreover, she is about the same size and age as Tails was.

"Heh, I'm sorry if I scare you. I just came here some time ago from far away and...well, I got too caught up on how beautiful this place is. So, I don't have a place to stay, yet...may I ask if I can...stay with you," the mysterious fox ask. The question slap Tails out somewhat and reply, "ummm...you can...stay with me and Sonic if you don't mind."

"Thank you, sweetie, you made my day," she said before she kiss him on the head, causing the love-sick fox to faint partly. Before she went inside, Tails recover and got up, then ask, "May I ask your name?" She smile and reply, "Oh sure, sorry about that. My name is Sophia Nimana Fox, who may you be?" Tails rubbed his hand on his back of his head and reply, "Heh, my name is Miles Prower, but I prefer being called Tails."

"Okay, then...thank you for helping me out, Tails." He blushed at the comment, as she walks inside. He was too shy to notice that she has an evil smile on her face, as she was laughing in her head. Sonic, who was about to fall asleep, decided to look up at the white fox. She saw him looking at her and made a quick switch in personality, smiling peacefully at Sonic.

"I am sorry if I woke you up, Mr. Hedgehog. I am new around here and just would like to stay here for tonight, until I can request a place of my own." Sonic, who was puzzled by the brief expression she had on her face, just decided that he was imagining thing. "Ummm...sure, I guess. Name's Sonic...Sonic the Hedgehog." She looks at his face and reply, "Thank you, Sonic, and my name is Sophia."

Tails prepared his bad for her to sleep in, but before he even get a chance to laid down on the couch, Sonic was already there sleeping. Sonic’s bed was tidy and prep for someone to sleep in, so Tails smile as he took the hint and sleep in Sonic's bed. Sophia laid in Tails's and roll away from the two in view. The same evil smile pops up again without anyone seeing it. <"When the time is right, I'll terminate the pesky Freedom Fighters for the new Robotnik!">

= Next Part: "Can Robot Love?" =

Edited: Story have been revamp, read again to get the idea.

= Part Two: "Can Robot Love?" =

It was morning time, as the birds decided to singing their song. Everyone was preparing for the long day ahead as the people of new Mobotropolis. Sonic and Tails was finishing their breakfast while Sophia, unknown to them as Robo-Fiona, was cleaning up their room as a thank-you message. When everyone was done, Sonic and Tails took Sophia to Sally about asking for a private room for her. Nicole was with her at the time, trying to fix an error from yesterday.

"Sal, may I borrow you for a moment," ask Sonic, waving to Sally. "Huh? Ummm...sure, what you need Sonic," Sally ask as both she and Nicole stop what they are doing. "Well, this girl Sophia came here from a far and don't have any place to hang, so is there any room open for her to have," Sonic reply, ending with a question of his own.

"Hmmm...let me check," she walk to Sophia and reply, "Nice to meet you, Sophia; I am Sally Acorn at your service. If you don't mind, come with me and I'll get you settle down." Sophia, who was listening to Sally, had her eyes on Nicole, and was shaking nervously. Sally and Nicole looks at her with a confused stared for a moment, but Sophia slap out of it quickly and reply, "Thank you, Sally, I appreciate it!"

Sonic was watching all this and starting to get an odd familiar feeling to this situation. He couldn't shake it off, but he decided that he might need some proof before he goes into the matter. Tails was looking at Sophia as she was walking away; he has the most lovesick looks in his eye. Sonic notice and decide to speak to Tails, "Bro, if you interest in this foxy girl, so for it...but, promise me that you will be careful and try not to get too lovesick over her, you know, just in case."

Tails look at Sonic for moment, a little angry at him for saying that. But, the fact that two girl already betray him badly made him mellow out a little and reply with a smile, "Okay, Sonic, I promise." Tails walk toward the direction where Sally, Nicole, and Sophia are going. Sonic, who looking at his buddy walking away from view, was still worried. He knows something was odd about Sophia, but he couldn't put his fingers on it. He let out a huge sigh and dash off for his exercise run.

Sally and Nicole found a good private home for Sophia to stay at, while Tails taught up to them. "Thank you two, I really appreciated it. And, thank you Tails, for letting me stay with you guys last night," Sophia said, causing Tails to blush and rub his head. Sally and Nicole, who was watch Tails reaction, start giggling at the cute reaction. Nicole pause for a moment to look at Sophia, who was looking back at Nicole and shaking nervously, decide to calm her down a little.

"Are you okay," Nicole asks, patting her on the back. "Heh, yeah...it just you seems...well, mysterious to me, I guess." That got all of them looking at each other for a moment, then Nicole reply with a smile, "Heh, now that you mention it, I guess I can be a little intimidated to other. Don't worry, you get used to it," Nicole with a smile, which made Sophia smile back, sighing a relieved in her head.

Sally look at Tails for a moment, then smile as she look at Sophia and said, “Sophia, how you would like a tour of our city? I believe Tails has the free time to give you a tour if you want.” Tails in that instance just freak out for a moment and then went into a bashful motion, putting his hand on the back of his head and rubbing it. “I would like that, if Tails don’t mind,” Sophia said, turning her head to look at Tails.

“I don’t mind, I have nothing plans for today anyway.” Sally looks at Tails and Sophia and happily replies to Tails, “Then, everything is settled now! Tails, try your best to make Sophia feel welcome!” Tails look at Sophia, trying not to look nervous, and said, “Umm…heh, okay Sophia, let me show you some sites here at New Mobotropolis.” He and Sophia walk off, leaving Sally and Nicole giggling some more.

Tails walk to the first site, which is Uncle Chuck’s stand. It was a good size building, built with fine and shiny material, like most of the city. “This here is where we goes to eat. Uncle Chuck made the finest meals ever, if he isn’t busy as a member of the Council of Acorn. Uncle Chuck is Sonic’s uncle as well as one of the finest inventor we ever have,” Tails states as Sophia listen. Then, Sophia walks close to Tails face and ask in a luring manner, “Do you think I can sample some of this fine cooking, hun?”

Tails back up, both blushing and freaking, and walk around her and nervously reply, “Errr…sure, I guess.” They walking inside and gotten a meal, which was a nice Salisbury steak with potato. “So, after this, you think I can see this Council of Acorn you speak of,” Sophia ask. “I’m afraid not, it resides in a restrict area for normal civilians.” Sophia sigh, seeing that there was no way to get close to spy on the council.

They walk out after eating, holding some milkshakes in their hand, as Tails continue onward with the tour. The tour takes them to the Tommy Foundation Hospital, where Tails explains about the bravery of Tommy and how he sacrifices himself to defeat A.D.A.M. Then, they journey around the town where Tails show Sophia the resident area. Lastly, he takes Sophia to his new workshop.

Sophia, looking at all the devices and other materials around the area, has her mouth wide open with disbelief. “Heh, sorry if it is in a mess, I can never really organize this place much,” embarrassedly states Tails. “You made all these inventions?!” Tails look at Sophia and proudly reply, “Yeah, but some I had helps with and some isn’t my best invention.”

“For example, the air-board you see there is called an Extreme Gear and was very hard for me to make at first by scratch. I learned how to make one when we encounter the Babylon Rouge, who has large experience with Extreme Gear. Sonic, Knuckles, and I had to race them just to find out why Dr. Eggman hired them to destroy Knothole Village. We was able to accomplish this and found out he wanted a prized Babylon treasure…what happening to be a flying carpet, to our and Dr. Eggman disappointment. The Babylon Rouge, however, was pleased that they found something from their ancestors’ history and took it with them.”

Sophia was enjoying the story, amaze at how different this Tails is, compare to the younger Tails that she met on the island as Fiona. “Wow, I can see why the Freedom Fighters respect you so much.” As Tails blush, Sophia went in front of Tails and kisses him on the forehead, causing him to blush even more. “Hun, I thing it may be time to go to my dorm now, since it is getting close to being evening time, so thank you for the tour.”

Tails was too freak out to say anything else, while in the computer mind of the trickster, <”This is going too well to be true…though you may want to ease up a little, it starting to feels strange.”> Before she could leave, Sally come in rather worry. “Hey Tails, have you seen Sonic around? I haven’t seen him around since his exercising run.” Tails nod his head and reply, “No, I was giving Sophia a tour and I haven’t see Sonic all day.” Sally wasn’t please about that information and you could see it more in her eye.

Suddenly, Bunnie run up to them, scared about something. "Bunnie, what going on," Sally ask, more worry than before. "Eggman has sent a robot to attack the city, but Sugah-hog got to it first. Ah’m not sure if he can handle it for too long." Everyone was freaking out at hearing that, so they begin to dash toward the direction Bunnie was pointing, but got stop by Sophia. "Can I do anything to help," offer Sophia. "Sorry, Sophia, but this might get very dangerous," Sally reply.

"Please, I want to help...I can be very helpful and won't get in the way, plus I am very strong for a young girl," Sophia begs, knowing this is the perfect opportunity to study up on her enemies. Sally was about to reply with a final no, but Tails gave the puppy-dog eye stare at Sally, causing made her to sigh. "Sure, I guess, but please be careful and don't do anything which would put you or another in danger!" "Yes ma’am ," reply Sophia with an excited look on her, but in her head, <"But, don't count on it too much royal brat, heh heh heh!>"

Scene now take place on Sonic and a gigantic mech. It look like the same type of robot that Sonic fought on the Floating Island long ago, the one that was design to cut down trees. However, this model was bigger, faster, and apparently equip with mega-muck blaster and an energy-bladed ax. Sonic was dodging left and right, but no matter how much he try, he can't get an opening to launch an attack...and to make it worse, mega-muck around the area is making it harder to dodge freely.

"This is way uncool...this rust-bucket is giving more trouble than the last time I've seen it," Sonic said as he dodge a blast of mega-muck. "And, when did the Egg-dome decides to go back to his roots?!" The robot slings his ax horizontally downward, leaving Sonic’s nose close to the energy-blade and himself in surprise. He spins backward and launch off a tree to prevent another slice toward him. However, the robot took Sonic by shock again, when he stop instantly from hitting the tree and swing back at Sonic, who was in mid-air.

"SON-NIC," yell Tails flying to grab him and prevent him from being slice in half by the energy ax. "Whoa...thank buddy, didn't saw the ax flying toward me." Tails smile for a moment, but immediately was gone when his tails got shot with the mega-muck, causing him to crash-landed in a tree. "...Ouch," Tails stated in pain, "are you okay, Sonic?"

Sonic has a silly impression his face, when he was whack by something, but he snap out of it and jump down the tree beside where Sally was. Tails follow Sonic down the tree, to realize that his tails is still glue together. Fortunately for him, Sophia caught him in her arm, without showing any recoil. She set Tails down gently, looking into Tails’s face.

"Wow, you really are strong, Sophia!" She doesn’t know why, but she was blushing for a moment when Tails said that, before she shocks it off. "Maybe you should thank me after we deal with that," Sophia said, pointing at the robot coming at them. "Ummm...ah’m thinkin' you may have something there, pumpkin," Bunnie stated nervously.

The robot slings down its ax, causing everyone to jump out of the way. Crashing the ax to the ground caused a huge shockwave, sending almost everyone into either a tree or a pool of mega-muck, except for Sophia and Tails. “Darn mega-muck, I can’t move my feet,” Sonic said, trying to pull free from its grip, “I gotten to get loose, or we are dead meat!”

Tails was looking at the situation and didn’t like what he seeing. The robot was trying to pull its ax off the ground, yet it was having trouble, giving the more able Freedom Fighters a break to worrying on what to do next. Regrettably, Sally, Antoine, and Bunnie were knock out cold, while Ray and Mighty was stuck in mega-muck like Sonic was. “We need to do something fast, Sophia, before we will end up like slice woods.” She took a quick moment to think, and then gotten an idea.

She kneels down, with her hands in one fist, and look at the confuse Tails. “Have you ever heard of catapulting…you’ll go the high road and I take the low road,” stated Sophia. Tails, finally understanding, grin as he leaps onto her hands. Sophia then launches Tails high above the robot, a lot higher than even Tails expected. The robot, which was looking up at Tails, didn’t see Sophia charging toward it.

Sophia put her fist through the robot’s lower section and pulls back out her hand, grabbing onto some wires. That caused the robot to look down at Sophia, ready to attack her, unfortunately didn’t see Tails’s own attack until it was too late. Coming down, Tails hammer the robot hard on its top with his tied-up tails. It begins to fall backward, landing on its own ax, and lay still in an offline state.

Sophia, who was surveying the situation, finally had the freedom Fighters in her grasp. Tails was falling to his doom while the other Freedom Fighters was either knock out cold or trap by the mega-muck. However, something came over her as Tails begin to scream, causing her to unconsciously leap to his rescue and catching him.

“You saved me, Sophia…thank you,” Tails said gracefully. “Um, sure…after all, I couldn’t just let you fall after launching you upward.” Tails laugh at that comment, but in Sophia’s head, <”Idiot! What made you do something as dumb as that…you HAD him…YOU HAD THEM ALL!!!>

Tails and Sophia grab Mighty out of the mega-muck, and then Mighty and Sophia separately free Ray and Sonic from the mega-muck. Tails check on the other to see if they were all right. Bunnie and Antoine were lucky to just be in pain, but Sally got a broken left arm from her incident. After everyone was able to, they walk back to the city, hoping to relax for a while.

After some walking, they finally got back; few of them still have mega-muck covering them, while other is still hurting from the shockwave. Sally was sent to Doctor Quack as he patches up her arm, causing her to hold her scream painfully to keep her composure. After the seemingly endless torture, she joins up with the gang. Everyone else was able clean and freshens up, after being either dirty or still have mega-muck on them.

After Sally herself was able to get clean, they decided to go to a little party at Uncle Chuck’s restaurant to thank Sophia for her help. “Way to go, girl,” Bunnie said, patting her on the back. Sophia was acting the best she could to be very cheerful, but inside she was crying at the loss of her true victory.

“That was way past cool! You saved our neck from that bot-brain,” Sonic stated. Sally smile at Sonic with a sly stared and reply to Sophia, “Thank your fortune, Sophia; that is something rare coming from Mr. Cool.” Sonic look at Sally with both an annoy look in his eyes and a sly smile, then reply to Sally, “Hah ha, very funny, Sal.” Everyone was laughing, even Sophia, who was trying to blend into the group without giving herself away.

Everyone was cheering and partying, until they decide that it was time to quit and rest for the day. Sophia was about to leave as well, trying to think of the next perfect time to terminate them, when Tails walk up to her. “Hey hun, did you enjoy the party,” Sophia said. Tails reply with a smile, “Yeah that was…a great party. Did you enjoy it as well?”

“Yes, it was quite exciting, but if you would mind, I will be heading back to my room now,” Sophia said to Tails, before she begin to walk toward the door. “Hey, I would like…to thank you for saving me twice,” Tails said. “Oh, you don’t have to tha-n-nk m-m-m…mmm,” she stop talking when Tails slowly got close and kiss her on the lip.

It was a simple innocent kiss, light and kid-like, but it still took her by surprise. Yet, she didn’t bother to push him away. She didn’t know what to think of it and despite what her programming is telling her, she was unable to apply to it. However, Tails himself slap out of it suddenly and disconnected from her lips.

“I’M SORRY…I SHOULDN’T HAVE DONE THAT…I’M SO SORRY, SOPHIA,” yell Tails, freaking out that he did something he normally would not have done. He was running over in his mind to any reasons to why he did that, but nothing comes to mind. But, Sophia was too stunned to even hear a word that he was saying. Tails notices that Sophia was being strangely quiet and ask, “Ummm…Sophia…are you okay?” She still wasn’t able to say anything; she just stands there like a statue, with her face blushing heavily.

Suddenly, she starts stumble in an unusual fashion as she was heading toward the door. She was ignoring everything her programming was telling her not to do, and exit the door, leaving Tails with a confused look on his face. Outside, she continues her odd walking pattern as some of the residents was watching, wondering what is up with the two-tails fox. Finally she enters into her room and just stands there for a moment with the same look on her, still blushing uncontrollable.

She stands still for a moment, not able to register to what happening to her. She sat down and put her two fingers on her lip, not sure what she was feeling. From what she knows about emotion, the only thing that comes in mind to what she feeling was happiness. However, she was originally program to only simulate emotions and attitudes, not feel it for real. Suddenly, her happiness rise more as thought of the kiss come to her memory.

She fell down on her bed with a soft landing as she begins to giggle in an infatuated fashion. She wasn’t even aware of what she was doing, as she was hugging the pillow from her bed. This feeling was like something she has never truly experience before. Nonetheless, she finally slap out of it with a surprise shock to her face. She looks at the pillow in her arms, trying to put one and one together, to what just happen a moment ago.

The feeling she had before was quite familiar to the time on the boat, but a lot stronger. <”What on earth are you doing, Fiona?! Are you short-circuiting or something?!> She was looking at her programming, as if something terrible is happening. <”Maybe that error is coming back…but, I thought the nano-bots would be able to patch that up. I should do another check on my status.”>

She activates a program to run both error and virus scanner, waiting for any problem that she might fix. However, when it was complete, it shows her to be equivalence to that of a healthy being. She just lay there, confuse and puzzle, as she try to find out what is going on.

Then, the answer comes to her in an old memory, the same memory that she saw long ago on the boat. <”Th…that wasn’t an er-r-ror before, was it? But…it couldn’t be what I think it is…it isn’t possible for a robot…”> she pauses for a moment, thinking, <”…Isn’t it?”>

= Next Part: Truths and Hackers =

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About the "Dirty language", GMZ. You're 22. If you can't handle someone saying shit (when you yourself are saying crap), grow up. Sammi has the right to Freedom of Speech, which means he is allowed to say what he wants.

And the only thing I saw Sammi bashing in your fiction was the general plot of it. "The writing style is okay, if not a bit meandering. J.J. Abrams syndrome I suppose," There, he is saying that while you have a fairly good writing style, it needs improvement. CONSTRUCTIVE CRITICISM.

Personally I found your little rant filled with more hate. Sammi's is summed up in, "Fairly good writing, could use a little work, and you need to be more original than Sonic."

Your's, "stfu and gtfo".

-And I bet she would fuck like a tiger.

I agree with streea.

Also I think that telling someone "if you don't like it don't post" on a public forum is like telling a human being to stop breathing.

[Post deleted...I know what I said beforehand, but Sammi gave me a better C&Cs, so I guess I'll go ahead and delete this. I apologized for the outburst, I just got offended, that is all.]

SERIOUSLY STOP.

That's the deal with posting stuff you've made on the Internet, you have to be ready for harsh comments/criticism, and learn to take it with a grain of salt and use it to improve. You can't just go expecting nothing but praise, you have to work for it. And when somebody comes along and tells you what they generally liked or disliked about your work, you use that to improve and get better. Fixing the things that people don't like so they can overall enjoy whatever you've made a little more.

Sammi just told you what he thought was good, and told you what he didn't like so you can improve on that area. Sure it was a little harsh, but at least he told you what exactly he didn't like and not just say the whole thing sucked.

Also, everybody's allowed to curse to their heart's content. If you're 22 and still don't like hearing words like 'fuck', then you just need to learn to deal with it.

*Sigh* Okay, that much better, I will respect that. So, you saying that the characters is too blend and robotic...I see what I can do to correct that. However, I'm not sure how to do that precisely...do you have specially tip that could help me with that?

I wasn't referencing to your opinions or vocabularies, it just the way you represented the message across that got me angry. However, this latest is more thought out and more polite, as well as contain better constructive criticism that I could use. Thank you for that.

As for being close-minded and not accepting criticism...actually, I am very open-minded on task and I keen to listen a lot to what people applies to me. Heck, I made so many edited on my Sally sprites because there was many people giving me tips and advices. So, please don't get the wrong idea about me, I was feeling a little offended, that is all.

Edited, now seeing Wolf post:
I know people cuss, I am quite used to that long ago. But, that is not what I was referencing to.

FUCK OFF, FATTY

Hmmm, I will try my best, but it going to be tough. Thank for the better C&Cs as well, that was very useful indeed.

The plot is perhaps your standard Sonic the Hedgehog plot you would expect, so I'll let that one slide...

But the grammer is gonna to be an issue as it felt broken. While nothing is spelled wrong, there are gaps in the english. I often find it's helpful to reread a fanfic two times until the flow feels right. Another option is to let someone else look at it via PM or real life and maybe they can spot errors that you could miss...

Another tidbit is that things feel like they are moving too fast. Robo Fiona just got repaired(?), arrives in the village, and is suddenly brought into a battle that fast? Maybe it's part of the plot, but things should be worked in slowly so people don't feel rushed or miss on something. For me, I tend to write in people slowly so the auidence can get to know the character more before progressing.

Of course, this depends on how you write...for me, I always assume the reader has no knowledge of the content in the fanfic so I have to "break them in" slowly so they don't get lost.

Overall, it's got potenial, but the grammer still needs ironing out, things need to be taken slowly and it might help to add more mileage to the interest of the fanfic...

Yeah, I just feel inspired to do one...the one for fun anyway...heh, heh, heh.

Yeah, grammar was never my strongest subject...blame that on both speech problem and improper teaching method during middle school. But, this is just for enjoyment and I don't think my grammar is too bad that people hate it for...though, I should still get it check anyway.

Hmmm...actually, I was thinking the same thing when I was trying to figure out how to flush the characters out some. I was just enjoying myself with typing it and guess it didn't come to mind that it was moving a little quickly. Don't worry, I'll correct that among with the character's flatness.

Also will fix when correcting the character's flatness.

I will see about it...but, don't expect anything soon...I got assignments to my neck for a while. When it calm down, I'll have someone check the grammar on my soon-to-be edited fanfic. I'll post again when that happen.

Good news, I think I was successful at flushing out the character a little more and correct most of the flaws in the story. However, I would like to ask if anyone would volunteer to check on these before I decide to put it up...is anyone up for the job? I'll PM you the correction and wait before posting the new version, if there might be anymore I could have done on it.

Edited: I'm going to sleep right now...I'll look tomorrow if anyone up for volunteering.

Double Edited: I guess no one will volunteer...fair enough. I'll go ahead and edit the old version with the new version, then post again to tell you all that I have updated it.

Okay, I made some edit, so enjoy it please. *Smile* I hope it may be better, I have try my best to follow through Sammi and Hazzardous advices. The first part, you will not be able to see much changes until later in the section. However, you will see some major revamp in the second part, where I think was the main issue. In addition, I have also soften the romance scene a little bit, so it will give a better and more innocent feeling to the event.

Edited: I am currently working on part 3...will post it after I have someone check it and give me the thumb up.