*clappy*
The lines were short, but sweet. And what do you know-- they rhymed well! Your use of metaphors was good, dealing with all those stars and planets...
It was... cool! Sounds like a poem a very lonely person would write. And I like how the end goes. Very good ending. :gsseatdrop: :gsjoy:

What spurred you to write this kind of poem?

I got the idea from my first and last meeting of our school's Literary Magazine (couldn't attend any more because of Drama Club). I ended up saying "I am...something," and that gave me the inspiration. Eventually, it turned into "I am someone" because of the last two lines: "Am I with someone? Or am I someone alone?"

The lines were supposed to be short and sweet. And the rhyming here has been one of my better ones. I'm glad that you thought it was so good; I'm really flattered. ^_^ :gsjoy:

(*rolls eyes* I read your post and typed my reply yesterday, but my laptop wasn't letting me send information, like logging into Yahoo! to check my email or letting me reply to topics. O.O)

Cute!*vomits in paper brown bag*er...what was I saying just there? '-_-

Valten...

Just shut up. I've had it up to here with you being insulting. I just wanted to post some of my work, and even if the feedback wasn't positive, I didn't expect negative feedback. So if you don't have anything nice or constructive to post, please don't post at all. If this is your idea of joking around, it's not mine, and I'm taking it seriously. So stop.

as annoying as posts like his is, you react too harshly, unfortunately for this forum there arent a lot of ppl posting, theres no reason to endure things that annoy you like that but you need to learn some tact in handling things like that, if you go chasing ppl off then you may as well just get on IM with Suicine cuz you certainly wont be talking to anyone else here, theres not going to be anyone else

Sorry bout my cousin FTQ Ive changed my password so he's gone for good!
Unless he registers here cos he queit likes the place,*eeries neckbrace* o_O
Old password:Spamupmybutt0123
Just telling ya for the crack mon! :P

my past experiences say that youre going to be held responsible for his actions if he spams furthur under your name, and if another account appears and starts spamming under your IP adress then youre both going to be banned as the only way to solve the problem

id get things under control before that happens, im not threatening you cuz im not an admin, im just telling you what the admins will likely do to keep order in the forum

*sighs* It seems I've developed temper problems over the years. Maybe it has to do with joining Gaia Online. There, there are so many people that this kind of thing doesn't really...have to be tolerated, I guess.

I don't take crap very well. I suppose that around here, I need to learn to do better.

Well, it also seems that it wasn't really Lionman, but his annoying noob of a cousin, sooo....

Truce, Lionman?
Just don't insult my poetry and we'll get along fine. ^_^

Mathias, would you agree with me that we'd rather have a forum full of intelligent, wonderful members that get along with each other, than a forum full of insulting, childish boys and girls? We'd rather have no forums at all if the latter were true, wouldn't we?

Lionman, please be respectful with your criticism. :gsjoy: You're here to comment on her work-- not start a fight. Right? ^_^

Sam, your behavior's divine. However, let not your flames of passion consume others till they crisp. :gsjoy:

Now then, this is Sam's topic. It contains a wonderful piece of writing. Let's continue talking about it! :gsjoy:

Courageous Lion, what praise have you prepared for this wonderful poem?

Just read the poem and, well what can I say… it’s great! I myself am not much of a poet (I just can’t find that poem writing sense in me), but I enjoy reading poetry and this is well written. The short lines give much emphasis on the solitude of the person. The metaphors are well used, as Suicune said, and the rhymes fit in well.

To Suicune- I just noticed a minor error in your last post. You said "ladder" instead of latter, I believe. Dunno if it was intentional... Just commenting.

^_^ ^_^ ^_^ *grinning and smiling so much that I can feel myself blushing from the praise* I didn't mean that you could only say good things...thank you so much for the compliment, Felix, it means a lot to me...

*blushes* The rest of you flatter me too much...the poem isn't that good...you'd think it was a Poe poem or something...*blushes harder* I really am flattered that all of you think so highly of my poem.

Heh, never thought you'd make me, the tongue-lasher, blush, did ya? :lol: I'm also very glad that Suicune does not seem to think I'm going too far over the top. I am making an effort to tone down my apparent temper with insults and incompetence, however. ^_^

I can relate to the self-consciousness expressed here...reminded me how often I ask myself similar questions...

Well done.

nice one, quite personally :P
i like the questions, that make you think... ^_^



grrbml... i never was so good at writing poems myself :cry:

That wasn't very cool, sir. I wouldn't wander down that path of lies, trust me, I've been there.

Amazing poem, Sam. I enjoyed it very much ^_^ . It makes one think of themselves after reading it. Very deep.

Unless you weren't reading the posts after that,my cousin posted that.
He is gone now so please.....READ THE POSTS! :P