Alright....it isn't great. I am learning though. Please feel free to tear it to shreads. :yes: I am not easily insulted. Please don't post it for 48 hours, when I have had a chance to work on it with everyones suggestions.

Oh yeah, and THANK YOU to everyone who helped.

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Report from Canada
21 March 2006
Prepared by king-girl, Where are the CBs, Tiny Villages, Parrrrtay, and Judith Gap

Forum (191,604 posts) - Wiki - Webpage

Population: 284 nations
Delegate: Carbanousa (75 endorsements)

Diplomatic Events

• Although flattered, Canada voted against exchanging embassies with Christian Outreach, and International Democratic Union.

Regional Affairs:

• Sports
  Fantasy Hockey
  -Canada6 continues their domination of the Birth Place of Hockey league with over 3000 pts more then second place Durass Dreadnaughts. Though the real story this week is: Where did the Number 17 go? Hmmm, freaky.
  
  Fantasy Basketball
  - Equalism and Canada Basketball league is turning into a sprint to the end of the regular season, with both Nooterlands, and Canada6 (our sporting nation)
  securing a playoff spot. With the trade deadline fastly approaching many expect an exciting week to come.
  
  Fantasy Baseball
  -The NS Warriors Baseball league has been drafted. It sports 12 teams, including the Sport Juggernauts Canada6 Maple Jays (that actually sounds like it’d taste good). The season looks to be long and full of surprises.
  
  
• Special welcome to new members: Ellen, The Fiefdom of Stinky Buds, The Jolly Roger Despotate of Kotanik, The Community of Joe Bobs, The Democratic Republic of Lobago, The Grand Duchy of Cymraega, and Jonquiere-Tadoussac, Foreign Affairs from International Democratic Union.

Governmental Affairs

• There has been talk of starting a regional newspaper
• Canada voted:a tie on UN Resolution at Vote, Right to Form Unions therefore a vote was withheld.
• a new Amendment was added to our Constitution

OOC Happenings:

• Watercooler Happenings
  
  - A recent challenge has been made to ParrrrTay for CrAzIeSt by relative newcomer to the region, Kotanic. In the end, our poll showed that ParrrrTay unsurprisingly retains her title.
  
  - Kana Da has been busy making some great avi's for many of the people in the region. They are now proudly displayed.
  
  
• The Arcade
  - Judith Gap is whupping butt in our latest game:
  
  Death Jr., Another mindless exploding hamster game The man's obsessed, I tell ya!

Random Quotes

Alright KG! :clapping:
Fix a few quotes and URL links 'because they have a mind of their own and only work correctly when they want to! :wall:
Spell ParrrrTay correctly and I think it is great! :clap:

Ya, I like it to.

Few small things:

At the beginning, where it states the people who helped, there's either an extra "and" or a person missing.

After that, try to fix the three links so they're on the same line -- spacesaver and it looks better.

Put a line between the end of "Fantasy Baseball" and the special welcomes in the RP section.

Please fix the date :P Last time I checked, it was March, not January ;)

Try to space out the part in the Watercooler Happenings -- it looks like there isn't enough spaces, so the words are pushed together. And I believe Kotanik's name is spelled with a 'k', not a 'c'.


That's my critique. I like the fact that you gave how many posts we've done on the forums; I thought that was a neat touch. It looks good! Thanks for the hard work, KG!

Thank you for your help. I got tired of trying to see it all myself. :blush:

Keep the suggestions coming. Please wait one more day before posting.

That's what editors are for, KG ;) Keep up the good work!!

In the entry dealing with the UN resolution, replace "there for" with "therefore".

Should we include the latest constitutional amendment?

done and done! Thanks!

For the Canadian Webpage, please update the link to: http://www.freewebs.com/nationstates_canada/index.htm

It has been the new webpage for a while now, I dont know if anyone has noticed though.

I don't have time to list the changes I see needed at the moment (not because there are so many, but because I am leaving very soon), so just know that there are more.

Ok, I understand completely.

Consider: While Winter is officially over now (although it doesn't seem like it in some places), Hockey is still alive ... at least in our Fantasy league. The Birthplace of Hockey is seeing Canada6 royally trump the rest of the pack, leading with over 3,000 pts above the second place Durass Dreadnaughts. Though the real story this week is: Where did the Number 17 go? Hmmm, freaky.

(long-ish, possibly don't consider for too long)

Consider: The Equilism/Canada Fantasy basketball league is turning into a sprint to the end of the regular season, with both the Nooterland Nets (I believe this is the team name, if not, I'd add it in) and the Canada6 (insert team name securing playoff spots. With the trade deadline fastly approaching many expect an exciting week to come.

Consider: Seperating the visiting dignitaries from the new members of the region.

Consider: Adding a space between the semicolon and 'a', as well as a comma between "Unions" and "therefore"