As i walked into Olivanders i looked aroudn. The last time i was here, Dad had bought me the wand i wanted. The 6 inch one withe the phoenix feather in it. I smilled as i saw Olivander in the back . Some other first year students were talking to him about how a wand chooses his owner. I had know fro the strat what kind i would get. I walked up to Olivander. " Hello, if you have the time, i would like it if you would check out my want before the school year really starts. I want it in perfect condition" i said to him. i looked at the other first years. I could see some muggle borns looking at me. I smilled a little. One looked at me i i thought he was about to say something but he changed his mind. I looked at Olivander. " Do you have the time now" i asked him.

I'm not a mod or anything but, I thought I'd let you know that your grammar isn't what HPU would like it to be. Capitalize your I's and maybe run your post through microsoft to correct your spelling errors.