hey ppl, this is a new story i thought about please tell me if u like it

Chapter 1 Internal Conflict

I could hear them but the darkness was blocking me. I was surrounded by black and anywhere I looked it was a vast wasteland of nothing. I wanted to escape, get out of here because I started to get goose bumps. I almost felt a cold chill run through my body and I shivered. I could hear the voice of a woman. It was a faint mumble that I could barely understand. She sounded worried though. Then I heard the sound of a man, two men talking to the woman. I wanted to shout to them “Talk louder, I can’t hear you.” But I couldn’t. I felt like my mouth was stapled together and I couldn’t open it. Did I even have a mouth that was my real question? I couldn’t lift up my hands to feel if a mouth existed on my face. I felt as if all of my strength was sucked right out of my body. I was incapable of lifting something or doing anything at all. I was lying still on some kind of bed like a doll someone could pick up and play with. I was stuck somewhere I didn’t even want to be. I didn’t have a choice if I could be there and it wasn’t fair. The darkness was driving me crazy and I didn’t know what to do. I couldn’t move and I didn’t know why…

I like tghat, im really interested in what wrong with her :unsure: she okay? lol, you always write the best stories! continue!

thank u i will dont worry

i like it is she being raped? kidnapped?

:o I never thought of her being raped! I just think she was kidnapped and now shes on some sort of drug thats they gave her and shes most likely strapped onto a table, thats the reason her arms and legs are so heavy. Thats just what i think tho lol

oo creepy... MORE MORE!

yea audrey more! more or hope and i will do bad things to you with a cheese grater!!! lolol jpjpjp

lol! a cheese grater?! AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH SCARY!

:grates cheese: MWUAHAHAHHAHA :ph43r:

LOL!

YOU have to keep goinf through he wholething!!it pisses me off so much when people don't finish!!! AHHH! anyway, EFDS, ddn't you leave? are you bback? i'm confuses, but YAYAYAYAYAYA if you're back!!!

ahh a cheese grater!! so scary!!
dont worry lia i wont stop writing it, im in the processing of writing more but im on my friends computer so i cant post anymore
and dont worry, i havent stopped writing freaks either so theres more coming

thank the lord

lol yup

this is no laughing matter! j/k. write more!

^_^ yepp yepp i'm back lol, i left because i hated fearless, but now i'm getting back into the spirit, but i'm mostly ust ready the stories

here r 2 more paragraphs to keep the suspense going maybe u can figure out wats happening

I felt like my eyes were opening but still all I saw was blackness. Maybe I just woke up but why am I still trapped? The voices came back and still faint. They sounded like the same voices as the ones before when I was somewhat “awake.” Why couldn’t I get out of this place? I wanted to cry but I didn’t know if I could. The existence of my eyes was still unbeknownst to me. All of sudden, I saw a slit of light. The light was so bright and so strong that at first I tried to lift my hands to my face to block it out but there was still numbness in my arms. I shut my eyes quickly again. I tried to see the light again but I couldn’t. I couldn’t find it.

My hope of finding the light again was beginning to wither away. I wanted to find the light again but I didn’t know where to look. Depression crept up on me and overtook me. I gave up in reaching that Heaven but then the light revealed itself to me again. The light was still strong but I forced myself to keep open. My eyes began to water and I felt the tear drop from the end my eye down my face. The white light almost seemed fluorescent and the room looked so clean and sterile. A woman who was hanging over me was looking at me and smiled. My eyes were only open a little and my vision was still blurry. I couldn’t tell if that smile was out of love or of evil. Who was she? Then my eyes felt heavy and I put all of my effort in keeping them open but they started to droop slowly. Before they were fully closed, I saw the woman scream out something and I heard a quiet, “NOO!”

good stuff!! but if u dont update soon im gonna have to get my cheese grater ready agian :absent mindedly grates cheese:

lol ok im glad u like it that much

should i post more?

:o YES! why wouldnt you?! ur not thinking of quiting the story are you?! cause if you were, i might join in with Raquel! but ur not gonna get as easy as a cheese grater! nope, ur getting a pie cutter!

you tell her, girlfriend!!! haha! you're story is hott!

yea! haha pie cutter lol

lol efds
and thanks lia i will post more hold on tho cuz i have to make some revisions 1st

here u go, heres more sry to keep u waiting so long, havent had much time to come on here hope u like it

My last encounter with the light was really strange. Who was that woman that was with me? How come I didn’t recognize her? Again I was stuck in the darkness, the black desert of emptiness. My hope was back again, I was determined to get the light again and figure out who that was. What was she doing with me? Where was I? I tried over and over again until I could get my eyes open, now knowing that I had eyes. Again, I failed but then I thought about how I did it the last time. I had given up hope but I doubted that was the way I had really done it. I decided to wait for it. I looked all around and all was this disgusting, plain black. I felt as if I was going to go mad with all of this black. Then my eyes began to unwrap and the blinding light came back. It was like I had just been born again. The feeling of deadness faded away and I regained strength in my arms, only a little bit though. My arm just felt extremely heavy but I could slowly bring it up. I was lying on a bed and all I saw with my eyes was light and white. Was I dead, was I in Heaven?
After what felt like five minutes of an odd feeling through my body, my hand was high enough to block the light from my eyes. The woman I saw before came back. She touched me and I sprang my torso up from the bed and I stood up. I looked around. All around was white and everything appeared so frighteningly spotless and sanitary. The woman, who appeared around thirty-something years old, had a look of love in her green eyes and was staring at me admiringly, she was crying and her tears were rolling down her cheeks. She had brown hair with a beautiful face; her white teeth were gleaming as she smiled her beautiful smile. Who was this woman?

hey ppl i updated so READ!!
sry ppl of my aggressiveness hehe :P no but seriously tho, read it plz

OMG that was good! who IS that women?!

ull find out soon enough

NOOO! not soon enough! can you pst some more tonighty pwease?!?! causey me ish going away tomorrow until sunday! pwease!?!

ok fine, heres more

“Andalucia! Oh my god, you’re awake. You’re really awake.” She looked truly happy, as if nothing else would make her happier. Who was she talking to?
“Andalucia, why give me that face?” Her smile slowly turned into a horrible frown that didn’t fit her supermodel like face. “Don’t you know who I am?”
I tried to make out a word but I felt as if I had never spoken in my entire life. Her tears of joy halted and drops of sadness began to collect. “No,” I managed to let out. My voice was strange; I had never heard it before. “I don’t know you. Who are you?” I began to be scared. How did she know who I was? How come I don’t know her?
“Andalucia,” was that my name? Obviously she was talking to me? “Andalucia, I’m your mother. I’m your mom, don’t you remember me? Andalucia! Andalucia! You don’t know who I am?” She began to throw herself in hysteria.
“Who am I?”
“You are Andalucia Stevens. You are 16 years old. You have a father, a mother and an older brother that love you. We all care and love you.”
“I am not whoever you say I am; I don’t know I am. Why am I here?” I gazed around the room in astonishment. “Where is here anyway?”
My “mother” got up in amazement. She ran out of the room in a flash. Now I started to concentrate on what was around me. I was sitting on a bed, a white bed, not so comfortable. It wasn’t as comfortable as the one I had at home. Home? Where was my home? Did I even have a home? Who was I? That was the main question that I needed to find out.

GREAT GREAT GREAT GREAT GREAT!

HOLY CRAP~! this sounds alot like intrepid 2 memories return! does she wake up from a coma ? cuz thats what happens in intrepid 2

God, your story is really good! Keep going!

thanks i will keep going dont worry and raquel im not going to tell u if she does or not cuz it ruins it

more More MOre MORe MORE MMMMMMOOOOORRRRREEEE

aw but i think i already know

hehehehe this is cooooooooooL!!!!!

remember

:grates cheese:

hehe hope, thanks

heres more of my story for u to read and to love :P j/k anyway here u go, hope u like it :D

On the table that was next to the bed, there was a medium sized handheld mirror. I lifted up to my face. When I saw myself in the mirror, I gasped in shock. It was weird to see a stranger stare right back at you in a mirror and know that it’s you. My face was almost as gorgeous as my so-called mother’s. I pressed my fingers against my slim cheeks, my slightly puffed up lips, my slender nose, and I stared straight back at my blue green eyes. I brushed my hands over my forehead and I felt a few pimples on my face. I put the mirror down and put my hands in front of my eyes. My fingers were slim and perfectly tanned. My nails although were a disaster. They were bitten and distorted; they needed some work done on them. I slid my fingers through my flawless straight brown hair and blond highlights. My hair went all the way down to the middle of my torso. I pushed back my hair on the right side and peered at my ear in the mirror. It was pierced at the bottom and at the top. I pressed my index finger and my thumb over my earlobe and I could feel small indent. I felt the cartilage at the top of my ear and there was hole too. I moved the mirror into my right hand and I pushed the left side of my hair behind my ear. I had one hole punctured in my earlobe. Was this really what I looked like? Life must have been playing tricks on me because I was not this pretty.
Then the woman came back with a man in white coat following her.
“Oh, Andalucia, you are awake.” He had a pleasant smile.
“How can you be happy about this? She doesn’t even know who I am.” The woman was yelling.
“Mrs. Stevens, please calm down. She has been in a coma for five months, you must be happy that she is even awake.”
“Wait! Hold up!” I interrupted. “What?!?! I’ve been in a what?”
“Anda…” My mother said with a slight Italian accent, “you were in a car crash during the summer and you were in a coma for six months.”
“That is why I don’t remember anything?”
“Precisely,” the doctor added in, “you seem to have lost most of the memories of your past, even some of your childhood which is quite unusual.”
“Why is that unusual?”
“Because, in that short period of time that you were in a coma, most kids do not lose memory as early as that.”
“Oh,” I was pensive. I still wasn’t sure who I was, who was my family, my past, who were my friends, or where I was right at that moment.
I lifted my head back up. My mother still looked disappointed but she said anyway, “I’ll go call your father.”
The doctor and I both watched as my tall slim older twin of me exited the room. “Well, Andalucia,” it sounded weird when he said it with his American accent. It sounded different from how my mom said it. “Is there anything you need? Are you hungry or thirsty?” Suddenly, when he mentioned it, I noticed my stomach was rumbling a bit and my tongue felt dry.
“Yes please, that would be great. Thank you.” He left and left me alone with my thoughts.
What was my mother talking about? A father and a brother? I had more family members? Was she my real mother? I still couldn’t process that who I saw I was, was really me. I couldn’t believe now that I could not recognize my own family members or remember who I liked and what I liked. I lost everything to a stupid car crash that I probably idiotically got in. What kind of person was I? Was I stupid or was I smart? These questions kept popping into my mind, just a long chain of questions. Then my mom came back.

wow I really like this :)

u better add more...or

:grins evily:
:points to cheese grater in raquel's hand: