Seymour Guado
Race: Human Mage
Age: 137
Height: 6'2"
Weight: 192 lbs
Eye Color: Green w/ silver flecks
Hair Color: Red
Element: Fire
Physical Description: I wear a full-body cloak with hood, a silver ring
on my finger, and I wear leather boots. Down my arms I have tattoos of two large
cobras that come to life at my will, and on my legs are two dragons. These dragons
are the source of my power I have long, red hair that I wear in a ponytail. I looked
streched, like someone who has grown a lot in a short span of time, but I am extremely
nimble. I also have a muscular build from almost constant exercise.
Persona: I am rather antisocial, not talking to other people unless in dire
need of assistance. I am cunning, curageous, and dark.
Class: Mage
Level: 1
Equipment
Weapons: Oak Staff
Head Armour: Black Hood
Hand Armour: Silver Ring
Body Armour: Black Robes
Leg Armour: Leather Boots
Gold: 3000
Items: Bandage Kit
Skills: Fire Blast, Cleansing Falls
Backround:
~~~~~The story of my life is long, so you might want to get some popcorn. I
was born 137 years ago, at the exact time of the allignment of Jupiter, Saturn,
and Uranus. I was raised for five years in an orphanage, because my father
abandoned me and my mother befor I was born, and my mother died soon after my
birth. On the morning of my sixth birthday, a strange man came into the orphanage
and started talking to the manager of the orphanage. I wanted to listen to what
they were saying, but decided against it. A little while later, the strange man,
who was wearing black robes and a hood, walked in. He told me that he would be
taking me away from here, and to get my possessions. After I collected my stuff,
the man picked me up over his shoulder and took me out of the orphanage. We
walked for what seemed like hours until sleep took me.
~~~~~When I finally awoke, we were in a large cave, with a warm fire in the
middle. I got up, and immediately fell down again as a white-hot pain seared
through my legs. I looked down at my legs, and was suprised to find two green
dragons going up my legs. I crawed over to the man, who was laying awake near
the mouth of the cave, and asked him, "Why have you given me the mark of the
Dragon?" The man looked at me for a moment, then sat up on his blanket. He then
asked me, "Were you not born on the night of the allignment of Jupiter, Saturn,
and Uranus?" I nodded. "Were you not also born exactly six years and two hours
ago?" I glance at the sun and nod. "You were born with extraordinary power. If
the tattoos on your legs were not applied today, those powers would have left
you." I stare at the man, shocked, but at the same time thankful. If I was
important, I did not want it to go away.
~~~~~There was an awkward silence, then the man spoke. "You may not want to, but
you will have to stay with me, at least until you are twelve." "Why?" I ask, a
look of genuine curiosity on my face. "Because, I am the only one who knows the
art of the mage, and only I may give you the tattoos. If another man were to do
it, you would be drained of all power, magical and not. You must stay here for
your training, which will last for six years, and at the end of those six years,
on your twelfth birthday, you will be given another mark, the mark of the snake.
These you will have on your arms, and once your training is fully complete, when
you reach the age of fifty, will you be able to summon those snakes at your will.
Until then, I advise you not to get mad too much." "Why?" I ask again. "You shall
see soon enough. We shall start your training tomorrow. Until then, sleep.
Regenerate your body."
~~~~~I woke up tommorrow with the rising sun, as I do any day. My eyes readjust to
the lighting, and when they do, I look around, only to find the strange man gone.
I put my sandals on my feet and run out of the cave. I thought he had abandoned me
when I ran into him-quite literally. I had been running at such speed that I had
been knocked about three feet back. As I lay there, recovering my strength, the man
walked over to me and reached out his hand. I grabbed it, and he pulled me back up.
"Are you okay?" he asked. "Yes, I'm okay," I said. "I just fell, that's all." The
man grinned, and as he did so, I thought of something. "Excuse me, but what is your
name?" I asked him. "My name is Hades, and I have been put on this earth to study
the way of the mage and to teach it to you." A moment of silence passed, then Hades,
looking up at the sun said, " Oh, goodness, we had better get working. I have set
out a specific scedule, and today we will be beginning two spells, Fire Blast and
Cleansing Falls." And thus began my training as a mage. This kept going on, learning
more complex spells.
~~~~~Then, six years later, I finished my training as a mage. Having completed my
lessons perfectly, I recieved th

First of all... you may want to finish your background story. It's not quite done. I don't know if that was an accident or not, so I'm just going to say it anyway.

Secondly, there are some spelling errors in this. Probably simple typos because they usually consist in a single letter missing from a word. Seek them out and fix them, please.

Third: this is a fantasy realm, said planets don't necessarily exist and knowledge of them would be nonexistant. Also tied into this being a fantasy realm - you may want to make yourself... younger, since you're human. People don't live that long now days, and they definetly wouldn't live that long in a medieval setting.

Fourth: if you read the backstory, you would notice that there is an entire tower and order of mages dedicated to the art of magickery and the seeking or creating of such knowledge. This is called the Cethindol Tower. I suggest you take a look for stuff like that or PM another member of the site who could tell you where to look for it. Then amend your backstory appropriately, please. ^_^

Finally: you're not permitted to cast anything outside your own spells which are allotted to you at level up (check the Mage class to see what spells are available). Please refrain from "summoning" these tattoos on your skin. They're fine being there, but technically illusory (the use of illusions to take one thing and make it something else) isn't part of a Mage's repetoir of skill sets. So you cannot actually summon them up into the physical plane.

Other than that it looks good so far. Once you fix those and think you're ready to have it looked at again by a mod or admin, reply to this topic using the "REPLY" button, please do not start a new topic altogether, saying that you're ready to have it checked. Then an admin or mod will check your profile again as soon as they can.

Thank you for waiting for us to get to you so patiently! ^_^