1. Name of Character in The World-
Zen

2. Name of Real World Player-
Zeke Campbell

3. Age- (Real Life Character)
16

4. Class-
Twinblade

5. Clothing- (The World Player) Zen wears a loose black shirt that is to big for him,Some brown shorts that hit around his waste perfectly, a crimson red leather coat that looks old and has a hole in the elbow of the left sleve, a white bandana that fits tightly on his head, and two dark red wrist bands as well as white sandals.

6. Eye color- (The World Player)
Hazel
7. Height- (The World Player)
5, 5
8. Hair color- (The World Player)
Gold/Blonde
9. Personality- (Real Life Character)
Zeke is a quiet person as well as shy and not easily making friends because of this. He tries to make friends while still trying to be a brave person and to help most of the people who ask him. Zeke does his best to try and stay away from any bulling to others though he himself could be easily bullied since he is not one to fight back against others or to hurt anyone.

10. Weapon/Armor-

Weapon - Amateur Blades (Saber Dance)
Head – Bandanna (Repth)
Arm – Wristbands (Juk Rom)
Body – Leather Coat (Gan Zot)
Feet – Sandals

11. A writing sample on how you found the world. Not on how you found divergence. This is a fictional story.
(This may be a little off so you'll have to forgive me)

Zeke stared up into the sky from where he sat on a bench near the frozen lake of his home town’s park. It was cold, the snow was coming down softly only a foot even though it had been snowing for days he watched others skate on the lake while he sat only wishing he could be a little braver.

“if I could only…” He shook his head as his soft voice spoke out into nowhere. He stood up.

“I need to get home…” Standing up Zeke walked off through the snow easily maneuvering through it towards the buildings out of the park to the streets.

Along the way Zeke took in the sights of his town staring at the many different buildings sighing as he made his way towards one of the one story houses. It had an old fashioned mail box with the black imprinted letters of his last name. Campbell. Opening the oak wood door he entered the house.

“Zeke is that you?” came the soft voice of his mother Maria. She was in the kitchen making something he guessed. She worked for a while everyday, but his father worked most of the time for the family.

“It’s me Mom…” Zeke sighed taking off his coat hanging it up in a hall closet before walking towards the kitchen.

“Dear I have a gift for you.” His Mother said as he came into the kitchen she had the same black hair and green eyes She looked nothing like Zeke. She wore a white shirt and a small black coat and red pants. She handed him a box,

“You came home earlier then I expected so I couldn’t wrap it.” His mother said Zeke took the box opening it to see a smaller box with the title The World on it.

“Thanks Mom.” Zeke gave a weak smile before he took the box and went to his room which was very plain a bed, a closet, a computer, a door, and no pictures or windows. Opening the box he saw it an instillation disk and its guide. He didn’t like computers, but it could because he didn’t use it a lot.

It took him about half an hour to read the manual, choose the character’s name and appearance of black hair and green eye color like his normal self and he made himself a Twinblade seeming to be more like him as the more fragile class.

Username:Zen
Password:*******

Gold rings loaded him into one of the World’s beginings town,

“Whoa” He was surprised by the game and all the people who were playing it there was a lot of them. Looking around slowly before reading the signs to find the weapon shop.

“Hello sir, are you looking for a weapon?” The shop keeper said noticing Zen who nodded since the manual had said that’s what he should get first.

“um yes a level one pair of Amateur blades for you sir.” Zen took the blades and put them on his back. Walking out of the weapon shop he was knocked over by a passing player,

“Sorry!” The person yelled back as he made his way hastily away standing up Zen made his way around the town to look around and see what other things the town had before he tried to make his way through the rest of The World.

You've got some run-ons, and a handful of punctuation errors in your story. Oh, and your clothing description needs to be a bit more robust. The paragraphs in your story could also stand some beefing up, and whenever someone new speaks, they get a new paragraph.

Post once you've made your corrections and someone'll review it again. ^_^

Er... I'm done and waiting for review :zap: